Some may argue
for the Palestine that Israel has pushed their way into Palestinian and forced
millions of their people into exile stuck in poverty. Israel wants take over
the Holy Land and continue to build settlements to house their growing
population. The land that the Israel is building on was promised to the Palestine
in the Two State Solution. Hamas the largest and most influential Palestine
militant organization has been denied imports by the Israelis. Also the people
of Gaza are unable to developed and prosperous under the Israelis. Although this
makes the Israelis seem like bullies there is another side to this conflict.
The Jewish people
have lived in Jerusalem and everything surrounding it for nearly 1000 years. They
were thrown out by the Romans and then almost their whole race was killed in
the Holocaust. They have been looking for a place to settle where they were
free from anti-Semitism and violent oppression. The state of Israel brings
peace but has enemies and that’s why they have a strict trade on the Gaza. Many
allies of Palestine are enemies to Israel and may try to import weapons. Hamas
is a terrorist organization and has made attacks on the Israel innocents that
include suicide bombings. Hamas has refused to recognize Israel as a state and
has sworn them off as an enemy. Israel is only defending themselves. Israel is the true victim.
Yahni,
ReplyDeleteGood post. You seem to have formed a solid opinion around this issue. I like the angle that you took, by focusing on the dangerous actions of Hamas and Israel's right to be on the defensive.
Your intro contained some good history, but it needs a little more info at the beginning and end of that paragraph - that explains the connection to your opinion. The intro needs an intro and a thesis.
You could start it off with:
"The conflict between the Israelis and Palestinians was established when the Europeans..."
Your thesis is:
"Israel is the victim in this situation, because..."
Good start. If you had more time to spend on this, you'd be able to make these edits before publishing.
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